Jimmy's story in paragraph form

Jimmy, a 16 year old, is on the school's golf team and is preparing for the upcoming tournament. Little does he know, his secret crush Sally, is on the course too. Jimmy is so distracted by her good looks that he keeps loosing his focus on the game. Her being this close makes him nervous. He tries to be all manly by shoing off how well he can play. In doing this he accidently hits her with the "ball" (which is actually a commet). She became really mad and almost started to yell at him until she realized that he was kind of cute. Instead she decided to have a compition, so they shook on it and continued their practice. The next day at the tournament it came down to the last "hole". Jimmy teed off and landed on the rings of Jupiter. Sally was next to go and made a "hole in one", which won the match. Sally was all excited to not only win the match, but the bet as well. In good sportsmanship, Jimmy congratulated Sally who devoloped a crush on him as well.

My Seven Sentence Story #2

1. Jimmy is on the golf club at school and is trying to practice for the upcoming tournament
2. Sarah, Jimmy's crush at school but doesn't know he likes her, is on the golf course to play for fun but keeps distracting Jimmy because of her good looks.
3. Since Jimmy is so distracted by Sarah he either hits the ball too hard, or it bounces off of objects, or almost makes it in.
4. Jimmy accidently hits Sarah with the golf ball
5. Sarah gets angry and turns around to yell at Jimmy
6. Jimmy apoligizes to her and gets up the nerve to tell ask her to come to the tournament
7. The next day as Jimmy is playing he glances over to see Sarah watching him play

My Seven Sentence Story

Concept---Jimmy gets ready for his driving test that seems like a nightmare

(Experiences of driving behind a student driver )
1. Jimmy woke early one morning to get ready to take his drivers test before school
2. Jimmy’s mom, Martha, was hesitant to take him knowing he didn’t have much experience driving yet or even studied for the test
3. It had been raining all night leaving a lot of fog in the morning
4. Jimmy and Martha arrived at the DMV and Jimmy waited in the car for his instructor to join him
5. Martha stayed behind waiting anxiously for Jimmy to return with the results
6. Even after a few minutes on the road, the fog still very heavy, Jimmy was instructed to leave the right lane and enter the left
7. Without looking over his shoulder first, Jimmy preceded to do so and hit the car driving next to him. When they arrived back at the DMV and the instructor advised him to practice a little more before he took his test again.

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